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Chapter Two (Part II) | Table of Contents | Chapter Three (Part I)


NRSG:
A good day, everyone, and welcome back to BattleAxe! Last time, we heard Axis’ backstory and we also saw him for the first time. Let us get into it!

There is a scene break after the story, and we cut to Axis’ POV.

 

Distinct POV’s: 11

He says he noticed “the young woman” staring at him when he went past her table, but he does not think much of it. He steps onto the dais, “keenly aware” of the tension this causes among many of the royals. He “clenche[s] his right hand into a fist above the golden axes on his left breast”, which is the “traditional salute” of the Axe-Wielders, and he bows before Priam. He says “may Artor hold you in his care.” Priam returns the blessing “tersely.”

Axis straightens and “look[s] Priam directly in the eye.” Well, that is quite rude. He tells us that “sheer courtesy” on Priam’s part ought to make him “offer Axis food and wine and a place at the royal table” by now, as being BattleAxe is a position of great honour. But Axis notes “with some grim humour” that Priam’s sense of courtesy “[is] noticeably absent when dealing with his sister’s bastard.”

Hmmm, I can feel for Axis’ predicament, but also because of later things, I cannot help but feel that he comes off as quite smug in this paragraph. I mean, why care about what Priam thinks of him? He does not need him to maintain his position, after all…

Anyway, Judith fidgets with “a tassel on her velvet sleeve”, staring across the chamber. We are told that “[h]er dead sister-in-law’s fecundity, whether in or out of marriage, was a continual reproach to her own barrenness.” Poor Judith. She cannot do anything about this, either, of course. At least Priam does care about her.

Priam says that Axis’ presence is unexpected while making a show of dabbing at his mouth with his napkin. Axis’ mouth twitches, and he says “[o]bviously”, as Priam has begun dinner without him. Well, what would you have him do, then? Wait every evening on the off chance that you might come there? Even without the surrounding circumstances, this is completely unreasonable. I do feel like Douglass meant this to be some kind of ~slick retort~ from Axis.

Priam stiffens at this, and puts down his napkin. He asks why Axis came home from “Coroleas” so quickly. At this, Axis mentally explains how that happened. Nice. More irrelevant exposition.

Well, “over two months earlier” (so in late June), he had taken “six cohorts” of Axe-Wielders to the “neighbouring empire of Coroleas”. That is the large country to the south of Tencendor (approximately twice Tencendor’s size, judging by the later maps, though half of it is desert). He was there to help with their continual problem of “vicious summer raiders from across the eastern seas.” Going by this map that Scales has so helpfully provided me with:

A map of the countries outside of Tencendor, with labels manually inserted.

(Click the picture for a better resolution.)

I cannot exactly see where the raiders would come from. The only place I can think of is Deepend. Then again, maybe the later books will provide us with answers. I can say, though that the mention of eastern seas, plural, seems quite unlikely to me. After all, the coast of the Cornelian Sea is almost completely composed of mountains.

Anyway, the mission had a “dual purpose”, to both strengthen the bond between Achar and Coroleas, and to give the Axe-Wielders “vital combat experience.” He has taken his command there on “seven different occasions” to help the Coroleans with both raiders and “internal rebellions”. And these “successful forays” have helped him get a reputations as a “brilliant commander” in “just five short years.” Well, that is nice. On another note, we will not actually see Coroleas until halfway through The Serpent Bride, despite how much it will feature in the previous books. And when we get there… well, it is mostly pointless grimdark, and I am glad I will not have to be there.

Well, eight days ago, so on 28 August, Axis got an urgent message from Jayme to go back home along with his Axe-Wielders. The message did not say what was wrong, and he fretted over it for five days, as they sailed from Coroleas to “the port of Nordmuth in Achar.” And that is the mouth of the Nordra, I see. He left his “Axemen” at Nordmuth, and rode “virtually nonstop” to the Tower of the Seneschal, “exhausting himself in the effort”. He arrived “late this afternoon”, then found that Jayme was at Priam’s banket in Carlon, so he cursed the extra time it took to cut across Grail Lake. He sincerely hopes that Jayme did not call him just to have him congratulate Priam.

That over, Axis replies to why he came back so quickly by saying that he only follows Jayme’s orders. He tells us that “the remark [is] designed to irritate Priam”, because the “Acharite monarchs” have been peeved for centuries that the military falls under the Brother-Leader’s authority instead of that of the monarch. Well, I think we could have thought of that ourselves. Also, I am already beginning to hate Axis. Priam has done nothing to warrant this, after all.

Axis looks at Borneheld. He is furious to see Axis here, and he grips “the stem of this golden wine goblet” so hard that Axis thinks he might destroy it. “There was nothing but bitter enmity between the two brothers.” Well, how very considerate of him to go to the table at once, then, instead of waiting until Jayme was unoccupied.

Well, Axis looks back at Priam, “thinking that the man’s curls [make] him look effeminate and ineffectual.” … I officially hate Axis now. Are we actually supposed to like him when he see Priam’s curls and goes “ewwww, gay” (because that is what “effeminate” clearly means)? And he will only show more toxic masculinity going forward.

Regardless, he goes to talk to Priam. He says that the passing years only add “to [Priam’s] elegance and majesty”, that he gives his congratulations on Priam’s nameday, and that Priam must find it a great comfort to be surrounded by his “entire family” on this occasion. Why even bother, Axis? You would be better off just saying nothing at all. He pauses, looking Priam straight in the eyes, “calmly ignoring the white faces at his slight stress on the word “entire”.” Oh, really? You just had to remind him of that, too? I am not inclined to give him leeway here.

He asks Priam for leave to talk to Jayme. Priam stares angrily at Axis, and then dismisses him. Axis bows again, and gives the furrow formula. Priam gives it back stiffly as “Axis bow[s] again” (really?) and goes to speak with Jayme. Borneheld “let[s] out a furious breath” and turns to Priam. He asks “[w]hy in Artor’s name” Jayme had to recall Axis.

Priam puts a “restraining hand” on Borneheld’s arm, and speaks quietly, “repressing his own temper at the BattleAxe’s remarks”. So he restrains himself. How awful. He tells Borneheld it is no matter, and says that maybe it is good Axis it is here. The latest news from the north is not good, and they may have to use the expertise of both Axis and his Axe-Wielders.

We are told this is “not the most diplomatic thing to say to Borneheld”. But unlike with Axis, it was not said with a hateful intent, and that does matter. Well, time for another block of exposition, as we transit into Borneheld’s POV. Oh, we were also just in Priam’s, so:

Distinct POV’s: 13

Stick to a POV: 16

Control of Achar’s regular army is “theoretically in Priam’s hands”, but Borneheld is their actual commander. He has dedicated his life to it, and he is “a clever military theorist if a somewhat untested combat commander.” Recently, he was awarded the title of “WarLord of Achar”, though “many [say]” (citation needed) that that was more because he is the heir to the throne and less because he is so capable. I have to say that I really do not like the title “WarLord”. The camel case in here is quite out of place, especially since it is a feature of StarDrifter’s people, and also because “warlord” is one word to me, so it does not make sense to highlight the individual parts.

We are then told that suggesting that Borneheld might need Axis’ help is “to throw salt into a gaping wound.” And Axis did the same with his “entire family” line, and deliberately, too. You will really not convince me that Priam is worse than Axis, Douglass.

The Axe-Wielders follow Axis with “a loyalty, a devotion and a single-mindedness” that Borneheld “both resent[s] and covet[s]”. He wants the Axe-Wielders to be brought under his leadership, but he cannot do anything about that, and he watches the reputation of the Axe-Wielders grow under Axis’ leadership. Because of their time in Coroleas, “they [have] accumulated more real combat experience in five years than Borneheld [has] managed in fourteen years.” I sense an authorial thumb on the scales here. Little wonder Borneheld resents Axis so much. It also does not help that Axis got all the good looks, too.

The thing he hates Axis the most for, though, is that they share the some mother. Even though Rivkah “betrayed her husband”, he “still revere[s] her memory.” As he might. He hates Axis for “causing his mother’s death”. I mean, Axis could barely do anything about that, as he was a baby. Then again, I do not blame Borneheld for this. It may be irrational, but he should have had the chance to see his mother. Actually, StarDrifter is the one he has every reason to hate…

He thinks “viciously” that one day, they will meet in combat, “and then the world [will] see for once and for all who [is] the better man. Artor [will] judge who [has] the better right to live.” Well, I already know the outcome, and I think it is easy to guess. The stem of his goblet finally breaks, and it drops to the floor.

A servant comes in to replace the goblet and to clean up, and then Borneheld and Axis look at each other. “The hatred between them was naked enough for any to see.”

Now we cut to Axis and Jayme. Jayme draws Axis’ attention to him, and “[speaks] quietly so that no-one else [will] hear.” He says he is “pleased and relieved” that Axis managed to come back so soon. Axis smiles at Jayme, his hatred of Borneheld fading away. He calls Jayme “Father”, and says they were close to the Corolean Sound when they got the message. Ah, I see that that is the bay between Nor and Coroleas.

We are then told that the title “Father” is “one of deep respect tinged with some gratitude”, and that apart from his command, no one else accepts him like the Brotherhood does. I think that might just have something to do with Axis’ attitude. He says that it was “relatively easy” for them to get out and go onto the sea. We are told the Coroleans were (understandably) angry at Axis for leaving when the threat of the raiders was at its worst, “but Axis’ charm had smoothed diplomatic relations.” Hmmm, combined with the earlier bit about him charming every woman he comes across, I can only think that his “charm” is caused partially by latent magical abilities…

Jayme tells Axis that nothing can be accomplished that night, as they cannot talk at that table, and Axis is exhausted. He tells Axis to come to his rooms “in the eastern wing of the palace at sunrise tomorrow morning.” They can pray together, and then talk, and Jayme thinks they will both be called to Priam later on.

Axis asks if it is the news from the north. Jayme smiles at “his protégé”, and he notes that even in Coroleas, Axis manages to “keep his lines of information open.” He says yes, and again urges Axis to let it wait until morning. Axis puts on a “stage whisper”, and glances around with “amused eyes” as he says that he would “sour the cream in the trifle” if he stayed any longer. Jayme pinches Axis’ arm at that, but his eyes smile. He tells Axis to rest well, and concludes with the furrow greeting.

Axis says it back, he kisses Jayme’s ring, and then walks to the edge of the dais. He bows again to Priam, before walking away. As he goes, he passes Faraday, who “blushe[s] and turn[s] away.” A moment later, his eye catches that of the “Lady of Tare”, and she dips her head slightly, “a smile hovering about her lips.” I see that Tare is the capital of Tarantaise, by the way. And here, the chapter ends. Well, that was a lot of words, and almost no actual content. What a great way to start this book out. Maybe next chapter can bring us something more?

 

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Saturday, 25 November 2023 11:51 (UTC)
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“[h]er dead sister-in-law’s fecundity, whether in or out of marriage, was a continual reproach to her own barrenness.”

An early hint that the women in this "feminist" series are all about BEBBES BEBBES BEBBES.

. He tells us that “the remark [is] designed to irritate Priam”,

Completely unnecessary bad manners aside, doesn't he have any sense of self-preservation or common sense in general? Who the fuck thinks antagonising the KING is a good idea?

What makes this even more obnoxious is it's pretty easy to guess that he's being a dick to the guy out of whiny resentment over the King in question not treating him like a member of the royal family. (As he whines in book two, 'he refused to acknowledge me for thirty years BAWWWW and I would have cheerfully waged war on him if I had to'). Like dude, you're a BASTARD. In both senses of the word. Get the fuck over yourself.

“There was nothing but bitter enmity between the two brothers.”

Because of reasons.

And he will only show more toxic masculinity going forward.

Oh yeah. Big time. The guy's homophobic and has the emotional control of a spoilt toddler, is unnecessarily aggressive and violent, and that's not even getting into the way he treats women. Or that he in this book grooms a teenage girl.

“many [say]” (citation needed) that that was more because he is the heir to the throne and less because he is so capable.

Another thing which will turn out to be BS, because in practise it's the other way around. Axis is a terrible military commander and Borneheld is good at it. Borneheld actually takes care of his troops in order to minimise casualties. Axis treats his like cannon fodder, spurns diplomacy, and GOES TO BED immediately after a major battle instead of dealing with the subsequent confusion when his presence should have been desperately needed.

The Axe-Wielders follow Axis with “a loyalty, a devotion and a single-mindedness”

Which makes absolutely no sense because it's never explained. For one thing, after Axis turns out to be half Forbidden and all the rest of it, none of the AW desert. Nor is there any protest from them when he turns traitor against the crown and the Seneschal they're currently serving. It's completely unrealistic and stupid. NOBODY is so amazing a leader. It's just not possible. And as I mentioned before, Axis is not an amazing leader. He's a shit one who threatens his own allies with death by slow torture.

It also does not help that Axis got all the good looks, too.

Personally, based on the description, I think Borneheld is better looking than Axis (who quite frankly sounds just as "effeminate" as the king with his pretty hair and whatnot). But then I've always liked buff guys with short hair. Aesthetically anyway, being that I'm asexual. Plus Borneheld isn't abusive. Yes, he verbally abuses Faraday later on, but this is after he finds out she's unfaithful and has been subjected to months of her treating him like shit. He tried his best to be good to her and got absolutely no gratitude, so frankly I'm prepared to give him a pass for getting angry at her. At least he never smacks her around, which Axis absolutely does to his own wife. More than once.

He thinks “viciously” that one day, they will meet in combat, “and then the world [will] see for once and for all who [is] the better man. Artor [will] judge who [has] the better right to live.”

This whole rivalry just isn't given anywhere near enough development for it to make any sense that Borneheld out and out wants to kill the guy, to the point that Faraday has to marry the former purely to ensure it doesn't happen.

There needs to have been some sort of major inciting incident, or a series of them. Like maybe Borneheld was in love with a woman and intended to marry her but Axis raped/seduced her (this series really cannot tell the difference, but given how Axis usually behaves I'm gonna go with rape) and she got pregnant and died from complications, and Borneheld is convinced it was Axis' baby that killed her.

“The hatred between them was naked enough for any to see.”

And what exactly did Borneheld do to make Axis hate him? No, being heir to the throne doesn't count.

We are then told that the title “Father” is “one of deep respect tinged with some gratitude”, and that apart from his command, no one else accepts him like the Brotherhood does.

This must be why Axis subsequently has absolutely no problem with wiping out the Seneschal and destroying their faith while burning their books and throwing his own foster father in a cell.

“but Axis’ charm had smoothed diplomatic relations.”

Axis exercising his "charm" to "smooth diplomatic relations" in book two:

So,” Ysgryff continued. “I wonder what you could offer Greville and myself should we decide to ally ourselves with your cause.”
Axis stared at him coldly. “Apart from your lives?”
Ysgryff rocked back, angered by Axis’ words. “Our lives? You go too far, Axis!”
“Perhaps you have not heard of Earl Burdel’s fate, Ysgryff. Burdel thought to oppose me. This is what happened to him.” Axis waved his hand, and an image formed in the space between them of Burdel, his sons to either side of him, hung naked and dying on the cross outside Arcen.
Ysgryff paled, not only at the sight of Burdel’s death, but also at the evidence of Axis’ power.
“Think not that I conjure lies, Ysgryff,” Axis said softly. “I am sure you have contacts who can confirm the truth of what you have just witnessed.”
“You broke Arcen?” Ysgryff asked. His fingers toyed with the tassels of his cushion. Axis was stronger than he had realised. Well, that was nothing but good. He, as so many others, had waited a long, long time for this moment and this man.
“Arcen ceded itself to me without a fight, Ysgryff. Skarabost and Arcness are mine. If you force me to ride through your shiny soldiers behind you then I will do it. You may delay me a few days, but that is all you will
do.” Axis’ tone hardened. “I have not come here to bargain with you, Ysgryff, Greville. I have come simply to accept your aid. It is your decision whether to ride with me or against me.”


Maybe next chapter can bring us something more?

Don't count on it.
Edited Saturday, 25 November 2023 11:55 (UTC)

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Sunday, 26 November 2023 01:12 (UTC)
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NRSG: Indeed. I would honestly compare this to Mists of Avalon in how hard it says to be feminist, and how deeply unfeminist it actually is.

There's no way in hell Douglass wasn't a huge fangirl of that book. In a lot of ways it's as if she's trying to write her own MoA.

Also, "cheerfullly waged war on him"? Enchanter and StarMan must be very bad indeed.

You have no idea. Book one is mostly just boring and inane, but books two and three get more and more absurd, not to mention more and more offensive, and the "heroes" with one exception all turn into irredeemable monsters.

Also this concerning Axis being raised from the dead because he will be "useful" in the last trilogy. IIRC, he is sidelined in favour of more capable characters, who manage to defuse the situation without much of his input.

That's about as far as I got before giving up on the series. In many ways it was the last straw. You bring back your most hideously awful character out of the blue and then he doesn't even do anything? Come on!

The best in-universe reason I can come up with is mind-control, which I doubt Axis would have much trouble with.

It's certainly sort of hinted at later on when his dad is able to "seduce" women just by looking at them, and at least one victim has to FORCE herself to look away and has an extremely obvious uncomfortable reaction. Given how incredibly abrasive both of them are, I can't really see any other plausible scenario in which they manage to get so many women into bed. Axis supposedly uses "charm", but... what charm? As you'll see later, he treats Faraday like complete shit. No "charm" to be seen - just bullying.

Also love how Ysgryff immediately thinks that it is good that Axis is a "strong man". What in the world?

Yeah, that bit is just disgusting. An actually strong man doesn't NEED to resort to violent threats to get his way, and it also exposes Axis' utter lack of anything resembling charisma. He's completely incapable or unwilling to use persuasion. Instead he just threatens and insults people, both of which are the mark of someone with very little self confidence.

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Thursday, 1 February 2024 23:00 (UTC)
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So, second chapter -

I see the author didn't do her research, or she'd know that public displays of piety doubled as ways for the noblity to show off how noble they were - pun totally intended.

Priam's curls could be natural to him - my father has pretty tight curls.

Yeah, 'fourth or fifth month' is really late for a natural miscarriage, and since she's healthy and was regularly conceiving the tyranny of numbers means that at least one should have made it to term.

Okay, so there's a clear line of succession? Good! That means Priam doesn't desperately need an heir.

To be strictly fair, it could conceivably be that Axis really is just that handsome. That said, I have to wonder how many bastards he's left in his wake.

I have less of a problem with Rivkah getting pregnant at fifteen and far more with her only having four to fifteen months between pregnancies! For context, the current suggested minimum interval between pregnancies is eighteen months. (Queen Judith's spacing is also pretty bad, but under the circumstances I'm more willing to give her a pass.)

If Searlas wanted to keep the birth secret, he shouldn't have ordered all that torture.

Pulling back a bit, I think Douglass is trying to make Axis an underdog, but doesn't realize that she's undermined herself by also giving him a high rank and ample authority. "He's a bastard! His half-brother and uncle hate him! He was unwanted!" "He's a high-ranking military officer whose adoptive father is a high-ranking church official with the ear of the head of his church."

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Monday, 12 February 2024 13:31 (UTC)
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I can already tell Douglas fully intends to make Judith some kind of victim (or worse, asshole victim) later on and it's getting my hackles up hard.

Also Axis, if Priam constantly refuses you courtesy when you constantly refuse to show him respect, then he's got every right to. You broke the rules of hospitality first! (Man if Priam were fae, Axis would be fucked before the end of his first scene.)

...I wonder why the military falls under religious control and not that of the monarch? I doubt that'll ever get properly explained, which is sad because I could see some very interesting history behind that unusual system.

Douglas. DOUGLAS. 'Warlord' is already a word with very real definitions that do not really mesh with 'commander working for a country' very well. I don't entirely hate the weird capitalisations in this bit because I tend to default to lots of it myself when I'm stressed and trying to get my point across online, but WORDS STILL HAVE MEANINGS. *grumblegrump* call a rabbit a smearp why don't you

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Monday, 15 April 2024 03:42 (UTC)
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I just love it when a protagonist is an asshole. /s

Seriously, I understand Axis being bitter to some extent. He hasn't been treated kindly by his family, for reasons beyond his control (it's not like he chose being a bastard). But that doesn't excuse his homophobia. It also shows the author's homophobia.

At this point I'm only glad that he didn't make any snide comments to Judith about her barrenness. I once read a novel where the protagonist makes fun of his barren sister-in-law (not to her face, but in the narration) when she is upset about his wife being pregnant again. Seriously?! And this from one of my favourite authors (this book was generally a disappointment).

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Monday, 15 April 2024 18:51 (UTC)
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Also, we will not see Axis be treated that badly outside of this, so it does not come across very well.
In that case he comes off as somewhat whiny.

I had not even thought of that! And I am certainly glad for that, too.
Sorry, sometimes I do expect the worst.

That is indeed quite awful. Just for interest: which book was that?
It was a German novel by Rebecca Gablé, "Hiobs Brüder" (Job's brothers, if you will - I don't know if there is an official English translation). I really love the author, I've bought almost all of her books, but this one just didn't fit for me. Usually her protagonists, though not perfect, are still people you want to root for.

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Wednesday, 17 April 2024 14:02 (UTC)
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With Enchanter and StarMan I think that might even lead you to underestimate what will happen.

Now I'm worried.

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Monday, 27 May 2024 11:18 (UTC)
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- He steps onto the dais, “keenly aware” of the tension this causes among many of the royals.

And you're relishing in it, aren't you, you slimy little roach? Author, maybe don't make one of you (I assume) protagonists such an arrogant ass. This would have been so much better if she wrote something like he regretted causing so much tension, but he had a very good reason for needing to be there, so he can't just leave.

- Well, what would you have him do, then? Wait every evening on the off chance that you might come there?

Not to mention, isn't it Priam's birthday? He's the guest of honor (not to mention the king)! As such, he's the one who decides when everyone gets to eat. Why should he wait for a potential no-show whose presence isn't wanted and only causes trouble? ...okay, maybe that was a little harsh, since Axis can't help who he was born to, but the point still stands.

- Well, time for another block of exposition, as we transit into Borneheld’s POV.

Even more? Okay, well, call me when it's over. *breaks out a book to read to pass the time*

- though “many [say]” (citation needed) that that was more because he is the heir to the throne and less because he is so capable.

I know that nepotism is a thing, but this sounds like a stupid conclusion to come to. Why would you put someone incompetent at the head of your military strength, which is supposed to protect your home, just because of who he's related to? The only way I could see this being true is because the higher up the noble food chain you are, the better your access is to good teachers.

- He thinks “viciously” that one day, they will meet in combat, “and then the world [will] see for once and for all who [is] the better man. Artor [will] judge who [has] the better right to live.”

Oh, honey. You are raising your death flags left and right...

Jayme tells Axis that nothing can be accomplished that night, as they cannot talk at that table, and Axis is exhausted.

Which just makes me think that Axis came to the banquet specifically to cause trouble. Lovely.